here is the comic from 2015 (warning: it's a big DISASTER)
Added 2017-08-27 11:23:06 +0000 UTCmaybe you guys have seen this one somewhere before. Its my first comic back then from 2015 when I started drawing hentai, tried to remake it before but my pacing was too slow (too much page planned) so I abandoned my first remake project.
I will do a remake, half of them will be done next month.
I will take suggestion for the dialogues later since my english sucks, and maybe you guys have better imagination than me.
If u already have suggestions for some of them then please message/ put a comment here.
Comments
ok i will take note of that
2017-09-02 13:07:20 +0000 UTCpacing was slightly to fast, but other than that, i gotta say this was pretty good, art, panels and all. didn't feel overly cluttered either despite being abit cluttered. But in a good way. Story slightly confusing if you read through it fast, but thats mainly just due to the pacing being abit to fast, i'd say it'd need 1-3 pages more, at least one that informs you she got pregnant with her firstborn, or where she gives birth to the firstborn. But nothing more really. Story sort of cheese (all hentai stories are cheese unless you turn them vanilla), but i've read 1000 times worse stories. I say, keep it up the way you got it, it's good. just add a extra page when you're in doubt and feel the pacing is a bit to fast.
Kameho
2017-08-30 22:20:31 +0000 UTCme too. my pacing sucks. i will stick with this one but with better drawing and (hopefully) better dialogues. lol.
2017-08-28 16:17:08 +0000 UTCYou're being too hard on yourself it's not as bad as you say, sure the dialogues are bit weird and the whole thing is rough on the edges and the narrator idea is a bit strange(for me at least) but the base idea of the story is good same thing for the drawing. I'd like to help you but sadly I don't know much in comic pacing.
HibouBarbu
2017-08-28 15:45:00 +0000 UTC
